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The Chosen one feedback
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Steve "KingSlayer" Davids Offline
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05-01-2013, 01:43 AM

Your clearly good with your dialogue but I don't like the fact I cannot picture what any of your characters look like due to lack of description. The humour is good, I assume you are trying to make your character look stupid in a way? Not sure stupid is the right word, childish maybe? Other than that it is good but work on your grammar too. That's all I can say really...
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The Chosen one feedback - by Gamegenie - 04-28-2013, 08:13 PM
The Chosen one feedback - by Steve "KingSlayer" Davids - 05-01-2013, 01:43 AM
RE: The Chosen one feedback - by Gamegenie - 05-01-2013, 04:35 PM



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