X-treme Wrestling Federation

the Chosen one

Here come my newest rp ^^

any negative though our positive is welcome as usual.

Good reading =)

Your clearly good with your dialogue but I don't like the fact I cannot picture what any of your characters look like due to lack of description. The humour is good, I assume you are trying to make your character look stupid in a way? Not sure stupid is the right word, childish maybe? Other than that it is good but work on your grammar too. That's all I can say really...

(05-01-2013, 01:43 AM)SteveDavids Said: [ -> ]Your clearly good with your dialogue but I don't like the fact I cannot picture what any of your characters look like due to lack of description. The humour is good, I assume you are trying to make your character look stupid in a way? Not sure stupid is the right word, childish maybe? Other than that it is good but work on your grammar too. That's all I can say really...

Thanks for your though about my rp,, i'll try my best to improve the grammar for sure.

As for the lack of description, i try my best to find good word to make everyone understand, but it's not easy when you have french like first language and those words doesn't come out quickly so i struggle a l'il bit lol.

And for your question about the direction of my character, yes i make goofy because using humor suit him very well.

XWF love funny gimmick like my character ( i guess) and the Senator ^^.

Maybe i found a way to develop his trash talk.

If any of you have some suggestion to make my character evolve, i'll take it .

(05-01-2013, 04:35 PM)Gamegenie Said: [ -> ]

(05-01-2013, 01:43 AM)SteveDavids Said: [ -> ]Your clearly good with your dialogue but I don't like the fact I cannot picture what any of your characters look like due to lack of description. The humour is good, I assume you are trying to make your character look stupid in a way? Not sure stupid is the right word, childish maybe? Other than that it is good but work on your grammar too. That's all I can say really...

Thanks for your though about my rp,, i'll try my best to improve the grammar for sure.

As for the lack of description, i try my best to find good word to make everyone understand, but it's not easy when you have french like first language and those words doesn't come out quickly so i struggle a l'il bit lol.

And for your question about the direction of my character, yes i make goofy because using humor suit him very well.

XWF love funny gimmick like my character ( i guess) and the Senator ^^.

Maybe i found a way to develop his trash talk.

If any of you have some suggestion to make my character evolve, i'll take it .

Ah, I apologize. I didn't realize that French was your first language, in that case your grammar is pretty impressive. Your character is certainly unique and I enjoyed reading your RP.