Now I know a few people read my RPs to a point, at least i would assume based on my likes...but either way. I wanted to get some constructive criticism from you all on how my RPs are coming off. By constructive, im tallking negative AND positive. I do have a set style that works for my schedule. not that i don't want to improve, i just don't have hours on end to brainstorm/outline/rough draft every RP I do. I have three kids and work 6 or 7 days a week. My style lets me compose RPs within an hour, thats why they read mostly like promos. With all that in mind, I would like to see what you guys think I can do to improve. I'll give you links to my normal RPs, which I'm more concerned about getting feedback on.

Madness Short RP
Madness Normal RP
Madness Normal RP2
Madness Short RP2

the last one i was kinda strapped for time, so it got done in about 20 minute. regardless, i still want feedback on these since they are the most recent.