I wouldn't start out an RP where you say you don't know how to do something, lol. If you aren't sure how something works then don't include it. Ask someone for help instead.

Anyway, the code for adding videos is...


As far as your writing goes, it looks decent. But I would change it up a little bit so that it isn't so plain. Here's just a quick look at how I would rewrite the opening to your RP. I did this really quick so there are probably a lot of better ways to do it.

How you wrote it:

Quote:The scene comes to life with Bryce surrounded by criminals they all have weapons and those weapons are aimed at Bryce, he doesn't know what to do, he tries to flee however it is unsuccessful. He feels trapped, he has no escape. You see he is in the solitary confinment room of a prison, and the prisoners managed to get a hold of weapons and start a prison break, they saw him and then he knew he was as good as dead, what a terrible way to go. They are just about to shoot him when.

My version of how I would write it:

A toothbrush and a spoon; two objects that we don't usually think of as dangerous weapons. However, once you place these two simple household objects into the hands of two death row inmates, they become instruments of death. All of a sudden, death row takes on a whole new meaning.

There's no easy way to look at it; I'm trapped. As if being thrown behind bars wasn't enough, I'm cornered in a small room no bigger than the bathroom of your typical family house. It's like being a caged rat in the middle of a snake pit.

And what is the nature of my impending execution? A prison break. Go figure, I'm three weeks out from being released from this shit hole and these two hardened fuck ups decide to pay me a visit on their way out. Seriously, why aren't they just escaping?





IMO, my version of your story is easier to follow and doesn't just follow the same old routine. It isn't perfect, or even good, but it at least attempts to break away from the norm. Put your thoughts and observations out there rather than just describing what's taking place in a sequence.

There are several people here who can do it better than I do. I like how Shots does it, check his stuff out.