(05-28-2020, 02:43 PM)The Jester Said: I thought that your rp was great overall. I loved the story and I thought the idea of using actors to recreate the scenes from your characters life was very creative. If I could just offer a little advice, when you’re narrating (setting up the scene, describing a location, explaining what your character or someone else is doing in a scene) it works better if you do it in 3rd person instead of 1st. For example, here’s the first few sentences from your rp if they were done in 3rd person.

The scene opens to a small metal folding chair sitting against a plain white backdrop. The camera zoomed tightly to the chair before Liam can be seen walking into the frame. He turns to the camera and gives it a little wave before sitting down. He sits there in silence for a few moments, taking a few deep breaths, before beginning to speak.