Ok, so I actualy had time to read it now. But first I wanted to reiterate how pretty your RP was. The coding, the graphics, all a very nice touch. Personally, I'm kind of a purist in that I feel that the only thing that should get an RP a win is the writing alone (I'm not really sure what the policy is here), but I have to give you kudos for the neat presentation.

But now, on to the writing. I don't have a whole lot of constructive criticism because the writing itself is really quite solid. The playfulness of it is cute and I liked it, the way you used video game tropes throughout was really very clever. The way you reestablished why Game Girl was back was also very inventive. I suppose the only two criticisms I have would be that it was fairly light on match related content (you did mention your opponent, but it didn't feel like there was a whole lot of oompf there), and while your work was light hearted and fun, it wasn't terribly "meaty" to me. Maybe that's what you meant when when you said you thought you rambled. It certainly read like you were having fun as you wrote, and as a reintroduction to your character it was great, but I kind of felt afterwards like I just watched a cute cartoon and that was it. Only other thing I can think of is I'm not sure how Game Girl makes the jump from the game to the real world for matches. Maybe this is something you previously established the last time you were here, but I was left really unclear on that.