(07-26-2017, 10:29 AM)Rosalina Said: Perhaps this second Roleplay will be more helpful in filling the holes Mr. Graves said I left behind

I Am No Princess!
http://xwf99.com/showthread.php?tid=28694

It's better than the first one somewhat. Here are some tips here:

-Lose the large images. They can work in moderation, but it feels like every roleplay you do half of them are just images.

-What are Rosalina's reasons for competing here? We know that she came to Brooklyn with Mario to be with him, but aside from that we don't know anything.

-Some additional story would be nice. You did try with your RP, however it would be nice to have more than "Rosalina flew to Central Park."

If any of these seem particularly harsh, I apologize, but hopefully these can help shape your RPs for the better.