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Mr. Radio Offline
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(the villain you love to hate; has cult following)


#1
10-13-2013, 02:20 PM

http://xwf99.com/showthread.php?tid=7450&pid=30528#pid30528
Thoughts?

And what option do YOU think Radio should choose?

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Liz Hathaway Offline
Do you have the power to let power go?



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#2
10-13-2013, 02:32 PM

I thought it was pretty good, and all options are kinda fucked in one way or another so it's hard to choose.

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#3
10-13-2013, 03:46 PM

Did not dig this piece at all, bro. It came across as too melodramatic at points (mainly in reference to the third person parts, I thought the first person stuff was really well done.) Hell, I'll go as far as to say that you should stay in first person for your narrative at all times.

My other big complaint would be that the dialogue felt forced and expositiony. Like, I'm sure the characters don't need to explain things to themselves, like the bit of dialogue of Radio's that starts with "I know exactly what I have done." It just seems like both characters know this, and it wouldn't have to be said.

Another complaint is that it just seems like you were tugging at straws trying to make Spectorizza sound nefarious, with all the overtly contrived options.

So yeah, didn't dig.
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#4
10-13-2013, 03:59 PM

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