Just wanted some feedback on my recent RP, it's been a while since I've wrote an RP so anything would be appreciated. Also if you were wondering if I'd do any story based RPs I will.

http://xwf99.com/showthread.php?tid=25025

Thank you.

Oh goodness! I hope you never have to dissect one of my RPs!

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Great work, my early vote for RP of the month

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I enjoyed it, gunna be a good match between us I hope.
I was never a fan of the constant replays in a role-play to be honest. You did it different than every one I had read in the past though, so I still had fun reading it.
I am too trying to get back into the swing of things. so your thoughts on my roleplays would be appreciated as well.
Good luck and have fun bro.

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It was a unique role play I liked it, peppering RPs with quotes is usually looked down upon but you did it in a way that works. A bit of storytelling/character development doesn't hurt you, even if its just a bit at the start telling us the reader a bit about your character what their motives are etc before you go into the whole promo dissecting thing.

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Thank you for the feedback guys, much appreciated. I understand how the amount of quotes can get super tiring but at the moment it's the only thing that will work with the format I'm going for. As for story and some information on Promo Sins, I am working on a RP to explain that but it's going slow haha. But anyway, thank you all

Yeah they are awesome, I've personally never seen the concept in the sixteen years I've been doing this. So I enjoyed it a lot, like Trax said, I would like to see some story on your character as well, I am sure the first one will be great. Can't wait to read your future work.