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#1
05-03-2013, 04:32 PM

on this work right here:

http://xwf99.com/showthread.php?tid=2582&pid=8641#pid8641

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05-03-2013, 11:20 PM

Excellent dialogue as usual Punk. I would certainly question its broadcast at a house show haha. Your RPs just keep getting better. The only thing lacking that probably isn't even needed is description. However, as this is a shoot RP I wouldn't worry about that. Great work.
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05-04-2013, 02:54 AM

I wanna give you feedback, but Stevie Wonder here summed it up too well.
I AM THE FALLEN ANGEL

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05-04-2013, 06:12 AM

Appreciated Smile
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#5
05-06-2013, 09:15 AM

I thought it was really good, though I thought perhaps there was a hint of the notion that your promo was somehow going to determine the outcome of the match (which of course, it isn't going to, in the actual fantasy world of XWF). Although, I've definitely seem stronger allusions to that in other posts.
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#6
05-06-2013, 11:06 AM

Just my character being cocky. I would never suggest that lol.
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