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Can little old me get some feedback? - AlexandraCallaway - 06-29-2013
http://xwf99.com/showthread.php?tid=4180&pid=13335#pid13335
To this. Shaking off some ring rust....going into the match a bit blind as I don't really know much about my opponents.
Can little old me get some feedback? - "The Phantom" Jack Kronus - 06-29-2013
I enjoyed reading it. It was quite good. However, it was a little bit hard to read. It lacked visual elements. An image of the place where she was would be nice. Also, the text was too plain. Don't be afraid to use bold, italics and that kind of stuff. But again, this is just my opinion...
Can little old me get some feedback? - AlexandraCallaway - 06-29-2013
Thanks I'll definitely look into that for my others. Sometimes I use them...sometimes I don't. But I'll think on it more.
Can little old me get some feedback? - John Austin - 06-30-2013
I know how hard it is to shake off the efed rust, I am currently going through that myself. I re-read your RP and thought it was great.
My only gripe is the paragraph that starts with 'Well' and ends with 'way too long' ....I would have spaced some of it out so it wasn't one long thing to read.
Other than that, I liked it and can't wait to read more.
Can little old me get some feedback? - AlexandraCallaway - 06-30-2013
Thanks Mr Austin