Dr.Psycho
The Demon Doctor
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Dr.Psycho
The Demon Doctor
XWF FanBase: Men, some teens (booed by casual fans; opportunistic; often plays dirty)
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Cadryn Tiberius
The Essence Of Excellence
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04-18-2017, 06:20 PM
So, in my opinion, the story wasn't too bad. For the most part it was an enjoyable read.
The biggest thing that I saw, that I can truly offer you advice on, is punctuation and capitalization.
As I am no judge, I can't say for certain. But from what I have gathered, if it's a close call, punctuation and such become part of the score.
So you definitely want to make sure you're doing your best to use proper grammar, etc.
Otherwise, I enjoyed it.
(Updated and Reset: 3/31/23)
Win - Lose - Draw
0 - 1 - 0
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Dr.Psycho
The Demon Doctor
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04-18-2017, 06:58 PM
that seems always to be the trouble....(sighs and shakes head) small stuff like that!
i'm usually always a good storyteller but putting small stuff like that where it belongs tends to trouble me and tire me trying to make it just so in terms of perfection
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Imperial
The Unchained Prince
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04-18-2017, 11:04 PM
(04-18-2017, 06:58 PM)Dr.Psycho Said: that seems always to be the trouble....(sighs and shakes head) small stuff like that!
i'm usually always a good storyteller but putting small stuff like that where it belongs tends to trouble me and tire me trying to make it just so in terms of perfection
Microsoft Word is where I type most of my stuff, and that helps you with grammar. Also if you're using google chrome, download the "grammarly" extension. It'll check your work and give you easy solutions to fix it.
e.g.
1. I teach people to use short sentences. This helps sentence structure issues. It teaches you how to use fullstops. - Short, sharp sentences, single clause.
2. I teach people to use short sentence because it helps sentence structure issues. - Two clauses combined by the word "because"
3. Usually when I teach people the basics of writing, if they have issues with sentence structure, I suggest using short sentences. - Multiple clause, using commas.
I also suggest thinking about what kind of person/storyline you want your character to have. Bring these things out in your roleplays as well. Have something that makes your different roleplays recognizable as having been said by Psycho.
It's not just about your opponent, it's about you as a character as well.
The Unchained Prince
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Dr.Psycho
The Demon Doctor
XWF FanBase: Men, some teens (booed by casual fans; opportunistic; often plays dirty)
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07-10-2017, 06:46 AM
Record. 3 and 2
2X HEAVYMETALWEIGHT Champion (7-6-17) (7-16-17)
Personal STIPULATION: Dragon House Match
Pm me for details on it
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