Could I have feedback on my latest roleplay?

http://xwf99.com/showthread.php?tid=3250&pid=10533#pid10533

Please and thank you

RECORD:
4 WINS
2 LOSSES
0 DRAWS

Please bear in mind that this is the first piece of yours that I've read, and with that I must say that I'm very impressed! It was a very well written piece that really didn't pull any punches about Hero's personality of being a holier than thou asshole who strives to prove it to everyone (At least from what I interpreted)

I would however, do without the addition of what word the censored words are supposed to be, as that kinda defeats the purpose of censoring them in the first place in my eyes. Other than that, great piece (I apologize if there isn't a whole lot of negativity in this, but it is what it is)

Just watch out for Flynn's RP man, he's kind of a badass. lol

Thanks man. I'll do without the words in parenthesis then. I thought that it would help because in some spots you cant really tell which word would be used if there was just [bleep] but thanks man, that means a lot. And yeah, I'm looking out for Flynn, I'm expecting one hell of a rp from him haha

RECORD:
4 WINS
2 LOSSES
0 DRAWS