http://xwf99.com/showthread.php?tid=20764

Overall Record: 2-8-1.

1x Federweight Champion.

Shitlist: Izzy Ravenwolf, Nate Higgers.

“We have never heard the devil's side of the story, God wrote all the book.”
― Anatole France

A nicely done trash talk response. Good work using her own spoken narration against her, too. The only thing I might change up was how you went strictly to trash talking and stopped letting us know what kinds of reactions your guy had as he was continuing to watch and respond to her clips. Make sure you keep us informed the same way as if we could see your guy's face and surroundings the whole time he's talking. That's a tip I received a while back from somebody very well respected in RPing and I think it makes a huge difference from what I have seen over the years in most feds. Also some kind of closing out of the scene at the end would have been good, maybe something that is going to lead into whatever you have happening in your next RP or something that adds a quick splash of character development before signing off. Better than just abruptly stopping talking and showing a YT vid nobody is going to click play on. I think the RP was well written and these little extras could only help boost it further.

Thanks, Nike. Can I call you that?

Overall Record: 2-8-1.

1x Federweight Champion.

Shitlist: Izzy Ravenwolf, Nate Higgers.

“We have never heard the devil's side of the story, God wrote all the book.”
― Anatole France

Couldn't help myself.