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Feedback on my Work As of Late
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Cain Offline
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#1
08-05-2014, 09:26 AM

Just looking for some feedback on the work I've done here lately. I know it's cliche but I'm just curious.
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#2
08-05-2014, 09:46 AM

Hey man, I really enjoyed your story and I do think our match will be extremely close this week.

The one thing I will say is adding more XWF relevance to your work is something that needs to be done because it is something that we (management) will look at when judging matches. You do include some but maybe not enough sometimes if you get me?

I genuinely think you could win the match just based on how good your story is though.

Also, if you can, try to respond to a trash talk piece because otherwise it allows your opponent to have the final word to say and therefore get one up on you - which is something else we look at when judging.

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08-05-2014, 09:46 AM

P.S loving the feud we have going IC, so let me know if you want to work on a segment or anything so that we can continue to build it.
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#4
08-05-2014, 09:53 AM

I agree with Davids... the writing is really good and the character is fleshed out and interesting. It just seems more like a movie than a wrestling promo. I dig it, though.
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08-05-2014, 11:43 AM

I want to expand upon what Davids said, about responding. When you faced Morbid you almost entirely ignored him and his trash. That, to me, looked like you agreed with his claims about you. You kind of let people shit on you without firing back. I'd love to see you just utterly rip someone to shreds verbally. Matter of fact, I think Swagmire and you should do that.
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#6
08-05-2014, 11:56 AM

OOC: I kinda suck at trash talk.
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#7
08-05-2014, 12:26 PM

This is a perfect idea then. Help you out with it. Swaggy's not as good as Frodo at trash, imo. It'll be fun.
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#8
08-05-2014, 12:58 PM

Fwiw, I dont necessarily think trash talk matters. It can, if its a part of your character, but there have been tons of successful wrestling gimmicks without it. I just think you have to at least keep it relevant to the match that week.
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#9
08-05-2014, 01:18 PM

(08-05-2014, 11:56 AM)Cain Said: OOC: I kinda suck at trash talk.

Well, you're never going to get better at it if you don't try. Yeah, a little cliche advice there, but it's true.

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