Rebel
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09-19-2013, 05:37 PM
1x X-Treme Champion (13 days)
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John Austin
Grizzled Young Vet
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09-19-2013, 05:52 PM
Prolly your best work yet...my only gripe and it's a small one....just space out some of your words next time, I know for me it's easier on the eyes to read but other than that...keep up the awesome work
To find John, turn those lights out because he will then appear...
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Rebel (09-19-2013)
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Rebel
Jackass of all Trades
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09-19-2013, 06:04 PM
Thank you man. I originally did have it spaced more, but it seemed like it was taking up more space than needed. but I'll remember that for next time
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Peter Fn Gilmour
the man with the SUPER DICK
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09-20-2013, 09:33 AM
yeah space out your paragraphs dude. but it wasnt that bad.. and its GILMOUR! not gilmore.. ppl need to remember that..
got my work cut out for me but i intend to make this match EPIC!
SUCK... MY... DICK!
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Jessie-ica Diaz
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09-20-2013, 02:21 PM
As cliche as it sounds, the book is the Art Of War by Sun Tzu. - Love this line.
All in all, really liked this piece, man. Using the Art of War stuff is one of those kinda cliched things, but it really fit for the character, and that's all that matters. My biggest gripe (along with misspelling names, it is Gilmour) is that there are a few errors in spelling, but those were just typos that can be fixed. Also, I think the sports references seemed a little bit out of place, for the character. Then again, I don't quite know all about the Rebel character yet. Keep it up.
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