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Mia Dim Offline
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#8
09-06-2015, 02:40 PM

For starters, fix the errors in this opening paragraph.
Quote:So, Davids responded, and he didn't disappoint me either....I expected a great promo from him and I got just that, Davids, I never once said was better at dishing pain out then you.....however I LOVE PAIN, I endure pain........there is no amount of it that you can throw at me to make me surrender.......Mr. Davids, I am much smarter then you my dear friend.....

I think your biggest problem is grammar or lack of editing. It can be painful to read at times.

The cool thing about that, is that it only takes a minute to fix via Microsoft Word.

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Advice - by The Reverend Tholomew Plague - 09-05-2015, 01:57 PM
Advice - by Frodo mother fucking Smackins - 09-05-2015, 03:02 PM
Advice - by The Reverend Tholomew Plague - 09-05-2015, 07:52 PM
Advice - by Bjorn Felhammen - 09-05-2015, 07:56 PM
Advice - by Vincent Lane - 09-05-2015, 08:09 PM
re:Advice - by The Reverend Tholomew Plague - 09-06-2015, 02:01 PM
Advice - by Bjorn Felhammen - 09-05-2015, 08:15 PM
re:Advice - by Mia Dim - 09-06-2015, 02:40 PM



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