I think feedback is an important thing in this fed. It educates and helps our newer people, but have noticed not a lot of people reply to the feedback board much anymore at least not like they use to. It helps US get new ideas or Hell just boost our confidence when we need it.

I just read your post, it was good but could tell it was rushed. My advice to you would be to slow down and really tell us about Jack Killborn. Tell us who he is a good background story makes for an interesting character which in turn catches peoples attention when they read your posts.

Spelling check there were some errors, I get it they can't all be perfect we all do it just check over your posts and.make sure you fix as many as you can.

All in all not a bad start just don't get discouraged it should only push you to put out an amazing piece next time. You are great at describing the surrounding just work on your characters backstory.

Interested to read mire in the future.

Amber