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MrVyper · **05-23-2013, 08:28 AM**

I'm glad you've brought it back as I haven't seen many women gimmicks. I think a dark woman gimmick is sort of missing in wrestling in real life and I think that XWF can really benefit from your return, just really try and develop your character as to why she's turned dark and use an angle as to why your going to be dark.

I've taken a quick scan over sinner and saint and although I guess I am contradicting myself if you've read my most recent RP, the length is quite intimidating, hopefully you don't take offence because it's not a bad thing, you just get into that zone and you want to keep it flowing but thats the only thing I'd say, go over it and remove the bits maybe you feel you don't need as I have to do that otherwise I would be posting loads of my ramblings haha. Other than that it looks neat, I will take a proper look later when I have the time but other than that it all looks good, I like the way you set the scene, I think if you read around the best from around here they are very good at setting the scene and getting the characters emotions across without saying 'Sin looks happy.'

Keep up the good work, I look forward to reading it in detail and reading more of your work!

As you can tell, I do like rambling because I've just rambled already. I'll stop rambling now.

Rambling, Rambling, Rambling.

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