Just so you know, always post a link to the rp you want feedback on but here is mine, hope its helpful. (:

First, I love that you provided a pretty detailed history Bane's background, it's always great to get background info.

To improve, I would say throw in more. Dialogue always helps, give us more of Bane's life. Introduce us to his family through a conversation between Bane and his family or something like that. Introduce us to some friends that may have influenced Bane along the way.

Another thing I would recommend is to use a spell checker. There weren't many spelling errors, but there were a few that could trip up the reader. But yeah, just more in my opinion. Throw in dialogue or a bit of action.. Something that happened that really defines who Bane is.

That's my feedback, hope it was helpful (:

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