(05-18-2013, 03:42 PM)Scott Charlotte Said: http://xwf99.com/showthread.php?tid=2807


So i've seen a couple people post in the feedback board recently and thought Id give it a go. I haven't made a Scott Charlotte RP in a while and wanted to know thoughts on this one before I got started on the 2nd.

Thanks and you shall be rewarded with bountiful...uh...bounties.

I found this quite interesting and it did have me want to keep reading but I do have one major problem with it....

The description makes me want to die.

'he laughs'

'he chuckles'

etc....


When he is doing these things how is he doing it?

For an example lets take a short description like 'he whispers' ....

and then transform it,

'whispering echoes of torment with a sad smile on his face, Steve looks on at Scott Charlotte with great intensity.'

Just my opinion mate Keep up the good work!

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