Hey Cobra. Nice work this week on Warfare.

As far as the quality of your writing (grammar, clarity, format, and all that), it's in good shape. There isn't a whole lot I can suggest in that area. I think I only saw a couple of errors, but it was nothing major. You did have a strange format thing going on with one of your RPs where a lot of the words on the right were cut off. Look out for things like that cause it can hurt you.

I think your creativity is the part that needs to get bumped up a little. Right now it feels like we're just tagging along with Cobra while he just drags through his day to day life.

Check out the stories that Duke(this week was a very good week for him), Angelus, and and Soldier put up. Even newcomers Shots, Crooks and Knightmask gave us some interesting details on the background of their characters. Those guys are good examples of how to build a story for your character, or how to give us information on your character's background.

Your trash talk is alright, but for some of it I just can't take serious.

For trash talk, look into Mark Flynn and Mister Mystery. I think that category goes to them hands down.

I think you are a good writer. But you seem like you're just staying in your comfort zone at the moment. And that's cool if you want to do that, but don't be surprised if the writers block catches up to you.

That's just my view on things though. Some of these guys might see it differently.