http://xwf99.com/showthread.php?tid=6731

Ok... I just posted my first roleplay. Like, literally, the ones for last week were posted for me by Addy / Shane... so that was the first time I've officially posted my own roleplay here in the XWF. Annnd... I'd appreciate feedback. Specifically, I want to know if it's better, in comparison to the last two parts of 'Satellite'... I tried to shorten it, and keep it interesting. I also explained what happened between raYne being sliced with a lightsaber [thank you for that, Ally-Cat <3 ] ... and the posts I made today, where he's in fine condition. It is the first part of two... the second will be posted within the next few hours, as I'm about to work on it.

ALSO -- The first part contains a video at the top [an auto-play one] that I created myself. It begins with a one minute clip I recorded on my cell phone the other day, when it was raining. Then... it becomes a music video for 'Now' by Paramore, only edited by myself, to include a voice sample of Michael Jackson at the beginning, and one of CM Punk at the end. And the video consists of clips from various other music videos which I mashed together... "Epic" by Faith No More, "Cage on the Ground" by FlyLeaf, "Brick by Boring Brick" by Paramore, "Tear Away" by Drowning Pool, "Enemy" by Fozzy, & raYne's theme, "Can't Stop the Rain", by Kropp Circle. As well as perhaps others I've forgotten...

... I hope that you guys will check out the roleplay, and actually allow the video to play AND watch it... and let me know what you think of both the rp, as well as the vid. I'm trying to get back to the level I once was at... any feedback is honestly appreciated, and if I am given advice that I believe I can use, I do plan on taking it. That's why I stopped using so much color, and this roleplay is restricted to the uses of three colors -- white, red & yellow. I feel as if they're not that bothersome... hopefully. Please let me know what you think... thank you.