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09-15-2013, 03:56 PM

Dude, I love what you brought to the table on that promo. You set the scene, and you really let your character be himself. I loved it, to be honest. My only bit of criticism? If you're going to have a change in dialogue (which obviously includes a change in colors, separating the characters), break them out. Don't put one character's comment within another's. It just makes things a bit convoluted and annoying for the reader.

But fuck, man, good work. Keep it up.
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Messages In This Thread
Some feedback - by Jason E Smith - 09-15-2013, 03:52 PM
Some feedback - by Tony Santos - 09-15-2013, 03:56 PM
Some feedback - by John Msdison 2.Faggot - 09-15-2013, 05:03 PM
Some feedback - by John Austin - 09-16-2013, 12:29 AM
Some feedback - by Great Buzzard Eli James IV - 09-16-2013, 09:27 AM



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