Not sure how much of a veteran I am, but I've been giving some feedback to people (although, not as much as I would like to) but for your first week here, I'm impressed. A lot of the nitpicks I have with your work (since they're just nitpicks, I won't bother saying them here) will probably get better as I get more and more familiar with the character. The biggest thing I have to say however is that there honestly no reason for me to care about the Jonny Rebel character. To the point where if we weren't in the same tournament, I probably wouldn't read a whole lot of your work. In that regard, I'm glad for this tournament, because you are good, however there's nothing that sticks with me.

Again, that's probably an issue of being your first week here, and trying to introduce the character more than the character not having a hook.

Like, to keep people's interest in my trash talk, I try to use humor a lot, which made writing the last piece I did a lot harder, being serious and all.

All in all, I think you're off to a great start (A fuckton better than mine when I first got here) and the thing I would say that could help with my main problem the most would be giving a look into the character when he's not filming a promo. Really let us get into his personality. His military service especially would be a goldmine for ideas in that department.

Just be sure to do two things:

1. Have fun with what you're writing and don't place too much value on wins, losses, and the competition matter

2. See the first thing.

You'll do great.