Travis McCoy
The Real McCoy
XWF FanBase: Men, some teens (booed by casual fans; opportunistic; often plays dirty)
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07-22-2017, 07:45 PM
Both solid man. I dig your color scheme. Easy to read. Looks nice. You're a good writer.
Nothing really pops out to me as bad, I personally don't like the use of the word jobber (apparently I'm not the only one. I meant j0bber) in a promo. Can't say why exactly but I'm just not a fan. That's probably the only real knock I have.
I'll tell you that right now, today, I'm not super interested in the character. I'm sure you have plans to build more but in just those two promos I'm not dying to find out more about Finn.
That might read as a more harsh critisicm than I meant it. But I'm not sure how else to say it. You're obviously a technically gifted writer. You flow through stuff that I would personally have a hard time getting across but to me the character just seems to be missing something right now at this very moment. It's obvious you have more in store and I'll be excited to see how you differentiate Finn.
Overall dude good work. I enjoyed reading both of those.
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Finn Kühn (07-22-2017)
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