Please bear in mind that this is the first piece of yours that I've read, and with that I must say that I'm very impressed! It was a very well written piece that really didn't pull any punches about Hero's personality of being a holier than thou asshole who strives to prove it to everyone (At least from what I interpreted)

I would however, do without the addition of what word the censored words are supposed to be, as that kinda defeats the purpose of censoring them in the first place in my eyes. Other than that, great piece (I apologize if there isn't a whole lot of negativity in this, but it is what it is)

Just watch out for Flynn's RP man, he's kind of a badass. lol