Okay, I went back. I felt like you deserved some actual feedback.

That roleplay is long as shit. I'd suggest breaking it up into parts rather than one giant piece like that, if it were for a match. People get tired of reading even the best stuff, you know?

I like the character and the interplay. He's got faults and weaknesses and doesn't come across like every other vanilla e-wrestler who's just the best in the world or whatever. It's good to have that depth.

It seems like you have a really good story in mind for Jon. Try to have some avenues to branch off of it though, so you don't run out of ideas or get stuck.

The segues with the lyrics/poetry were interesting. It kind of caught be off guard at first. Those could be could spots to split it up. Have you ever listened to podcasts like Serial or Undisclosed? It reminded me of that, how there'd just be a second or two of musical interlude while the changed subjects or whatever.

You might consider some color in there. Something to make it more visually stimulating. Again, boredom is your biggest enemy so every little thing helps.

Other than that, great writing. I think you'll win here.