Thanks guys. I do understand the word count thing, I'm gonna try and keep it under 2000 from now on, I just love to write and get carried away. >__< But, as far as dialogue, I know I haven't always kept true to it [sometimes I use quotation marks], but from now on, I'm gonna keep all dialogue in this format;

Person1: blah blah blah
Person2: yadda yadda

And Equinox, as you may be able to tell with my latest [Diary/Reboot], I had the final bit show the chemistry/relationship between Alice and Ophelia. I know the goth thing's been done to death since the beginning of e-fedding practically, but I do intend on seperating O.M., as his main characteristic is Vice and playing the devil's advocate, ala Sean O'Haire. So there's that.

But again, thank you all for the kind words and advice... I know most of you have a pretty good idea of who I am, but I want to try this character for a bit, as my main had kinda started to get on people's nerves .-. Anywayz, any more feedback like Trax, Lane and E. gave would be seriously appreciated, and Trax, best of luck in our match bro. Peace.