I'm new around here so take that for what it's worth.

Reads like a solid promo to me, nothing ground breaking but solid.

Silly little thing, and I didn't read your first diary promo you posted here, But if you're writing in a 'diary' why refer directly to your opponents. The diary idea is a cool idea but here it doesn't really add anything. Feels like you put a (solid) promo in between Dear Diary and Sincerely Yours.

Again that's a small thing and it doesn't hurt the promo, it just doesn't help it either. I'd just encourage you that if you're going to use the diary format take advantage of it. Your promos would stand out if they read like an actual diary entry if that makes sense.

It could be a fun way to do character development but I'm not sure how it works for a promo leading up to a match. I'm sure you could make it work but it kind of leaves your opponent in an odd place. Are they replying to a diary entry? Did they read your personal diary? Are you sending pages to the production team to post? is it vlog?

Those sort of technical things have never bothered me. If i was replying I'd just ignore the dear diary bit and take it for what it is...a promo. But some people may get hung up on that.