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Jason E Smith Offline
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#1
04-26-2013, 05:16 AM

I have only been here for short amount of time but would some feedback on my character and ways to improve my character and my RP's
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KnightMask Offline
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#2
04-27-2013, 06:13 PM

Well, I think you have a great character. Just tell us all there is to know about him in your RP's. Let us know about him through his actions, his speech, the people he surrounds himself with, etc.
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Jason E Smith (04-28-2013)
Jason E Smith Offline
Welcome the Darkness


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#3
04-28-2013, 06:08 AM

Thank you very much for your feedback much appreciated Knight mask
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Steve "KingSlayer" Davids Offline
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#4
04-28-2013, 08:13 AM

When I read an RP I like the characters background to come into the way he acts and speaks. Let the characters emotions be shown through description as well. I love reading RP's with a wide range of vocabulary and descriptive techniques as well. Definitely potential there though and an interesting character too, keep it up!
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Jason E Smith Offline
Welcome the Darkness


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#5
04-28-2013, 10:04 AM

thank you for advice and feedback Steve Davids you and knight mask have give me some good advice so on how to improve so again thanks
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