Let's trade some spit. You make out with me and I'll make out with you.

If you have read my stuff so far for this Ppv I'd appreciate some real feedback. Not looking to be told it's good and that's it. Looking for actual thoughts, positives, negatives; and I will do the same for you if you want me to look at something. Pick any of my rp's for the week and then tell me what rp you want my reactions to.

Only thing that made me a little uncomfortable was the "OOC" bit you did. Almost felt like a work around for an ooc message you were trying to relay. Its nothing that I would ding against you though since you were creative and didn't break character. I just wouldnt get into a habit of doing it.

The footage bit with Dims matches and the trash talk to Radio and Nova were hilarious.

if you have any tips for dim let me know

I'm just gonna say it was fucking awesome. I loved reading your work for the PPV. I couldn't stop laughing.

(03-18-2014, 09:56 PM)John Madison Said: Only thing that made me a little uncomfortable was the "OOC" bit you did. Almost felt like a work around for an ooc message you were trying to relay. Its nothing that I would ding against you though since you were creative and didn't break character. I just wouldnt get into a habit of doing it.

The footage bit with Dims matches and the trash talk to Radio and Nova were hilarious.

if you have any tips for dim let me know

It was definitely a workaround to relay a little something IC that otherwise would have been considered too OOC if left in its original form. You'll never catch me directly ooc attacking somebody in an rp but if I feel like it might be fun to work some magic and get a message across in a unique light, I'm going to do it. I do it way more than just with the ooc spider bit but that one was the most obvious because it included the initials o.o.c. for an IC conversation.

I also felt like if I could get the judges to understand that a challenge was ducked for no other reason than for knowing who handles the character, (which is bringing OOC into IC by default, because IC that character lost every single match and would not be ducked), it would further strengthen my cause and dilute their scores. I suppose we'll never know how much of an effect it really had since so many people were involved in the match outcome. I'm used to tactics like that having a much heavier and more obvious effect but you can't really expect that when the entire fed is in the same match.

As for your work I thought it was fucking spot on. Every time I read one of your rp's I just kept wanting more and maybe that is where my one complaint will come in here -- I really felt like you were building toward something jaw dropping for your finale. I could tell right away you were going to hit the max count and so I guess I just thought that last RP was going to be something more than what it was. Don't get me wrong; it was a phenomenal piece of work and amazing on its own but as the last piece to your weekly assault I felt like it just kind of stopped.

You got to the bit where Dim called God a again and that meant God was going to take that as a challenge. I can see leaving the 'scene' off at that point if you want to leave the Dim/God battle up to imagination but what I would have done is added a final closing scene after that point; maybe some kind of scene that makes us feel for, care for, or have a renewed hope in Dim even though he's usually an obnoxious prick who loses every single match. Or a 100% trash talk close out where you recap the way you've been owning the opponents and spend some time addressing a few points that may have not fit in earlier rp's -- a few shots at the names you didn't target as much, or some previously untouched points showing why the top names can't measure up. All I know is when I got to the end of your last rp I felt like it was just a lead in to what should have been a bombshell of a closing. That last roleplay should always be the knockout blow whenever possible.

So to put it simply, you left me wanting too much more than what you gave me, asshole! I really hope you keep that character around because I enjoy the fuck out of him.