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#1
05-18-2013, 03:42 PM

http://xwf99.com/showthread.php?tid=2807


So i've seen a couple people post in the feedback board recently and thought Id give it a go. I haven't made a Scott Charlotte RP in a while and wanted to know thoughts on this one before I got started on the 2nd.

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05-18-2013, 03:52 PM

(05-18-2013, 03:42 PM)Scott Charlotte Said: http://xwf99.com/showthread.php?tid=2807


So i've seen a couple people post in the feedback board recently and thought Id give it a go. I haven't made a Scott Charlotte RP in a while and wanted to know thoughts on this one before I got started on the 2nd.

Thanks and you shall be rewarded with bountiful...uh...bounties.

I found this quite interesting and it did have me want to keep reading but I do have one major problem with it....

The description makes me want to die.

'he laughs'

'he chuckles'

etc....


When he is doing these things how is he doing it?

For an example lets take a short description like 'he whispers' ....

and then transform it,

'whispering echoes of torment with a sad smile on his face, Steve looks on at Scott Charlotte with great intensity.'

Just my opinion mate Smile Keep up the good work!

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#3
05-18-2013, 03:55 PM

Thanks, honestly I have to agree with you. I write those in, but i've never truly like them. Was never sure how anyone else felt now that I know it will be changed. I'm trying to get a feel for this updated Scott and it makes me want to switch to First Person mode with things, something I haven't done in a long time. I've been predominately third person. But thanks for the advice Big Grin I will make sure to increase the descriptiveness.




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05-18-2013, 03:59 PM

(05-18-2013, 03:55 PM)Scott Charlotte Said: Thanks, honestly I have to agree with you. I write those in, but i've never truly like them. Was never sure how anyone else felt now that I know it will be changed. I'm trying to get a feel for this updated Scott and it makes me want to switch to First Person mode with things, something I haven't done in a long time. I've been predominately third person. But thanks for the advice Big Grin I will make sure to increase the descriptiveness.

Bare in mind mate some people might prefer your brief descriptions....

I am a little obsessive of setting a scene and having a image painted for me. Although if you have read my work you will know I try to do that, not always succeeding I might add.

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#5
05-18-2013, 04:09 PM

Yeah I can see that. Less is more to a reader, not everyone enjoys the same things. Normally when I write I always feel that I could add more and sometimes get carried away which is why my RP is actually a large length. I tend to type up things such as "He laughed" or "He smirks" to add a sort of simplicity that counteracts the dialogue I write. I'm not saying I fully like it because there are times I write it out and think, "Maybe I should add more to that." It really depends on my mood, but I like to shoot for more.

In other words I'd like to see what I could do with the adding some more description. If I it works and I like it then sure I'll keep it. If not then I can always return to what I know. Oddly enough with Scott it has become less descriptive and more about what he says as opposed to his former alter-ego The Wraith who tended to be a combination. I think with me it flows with my character. Wraith has more class than Scott and it shows in the both. What I'm getting at here is...well that i enjoy writing and when I get on a kick it's hard to stop. Some things have to be sacrificed.

So what I'm really saying here is that shouldn't be my case. I should bring all attributes into my story telling instead of certain parts suffering. As you can see I do get carried away because this is a long response. On another note this is a wonderful discussion that could be had. I'm also all ears for any improvement.




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#6
05-19-2013, 09:14 AM

I pretty much agree with what Steve said.

My personal opinions:
-Good Descriptions like "A women in a tight black dress with massive cleavage" xD haha
-Love the pre-story before the promo, had a good personal friend who use to do that when he RPed, and I was always amazed on how he could do that and still make it like a basic standard promo

-Also on that note, love how you somewhat mentioned the story in the actual promo for the match. "Well, shit. I didn't realize there were cameras there that night. Guinness makes me violent and yet slightly romantic. It's a wonderful thing, the Irish. I hear they had lovely potatoes as well"

Cons:
-Basically what Steve said, just work on the small things and you are set.



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