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rayne's RPs for Shove It - "Loverboy" Vinnie Lane - 09-11-2013
He asked about feedback so this is going to be his feedback thread. His first RP is up: http://xwf99.com/showthread.php?tid=6491
He won't be able to reply, but he WILL see any feedback left here.
rayne's RPs for Shove It - Jessie-ica Diaz - 09-11-2013
Mainly, I think that as someone who talks about his "legit writing" (hate that fucking term, by the way. Just because we aren't going to try to publish something, how does that make our work somehow less of a serious task? Fucking pretentious, if I do say so myself) I just thought it would be better. Nothing about it gripped me, and the trash talk/promo segments felt like more of your OOC stuff, only with a cool little text color. That took me out of it right away, and nothing else pulled me back in. It wasn't bad per say, but I wouldn't say it was anything special.
rayne's RPs for Shove It - Archie Lawson - 09-11-2013
I read it but i know if I say what I actually think raYne will get angry so I'll stay quiet.
What do I know anyway, according to raYne 'I am not a reading enthusiast'.
Lol.
rayne's RPs for Shove It - Mr. Radio - 09-11-2013
So many colors! Holy fuck! Like Jessie said...so calm down Rainbow bright.
rayne's RPs for Shove It - John Austin - 09-11-2013
Nothing striked me about it as being special like Jess said. Thought the use of colors was way overboard....didn't care for the David Bowie video. I am not knocking it as bad but I didn't like it either so meh
rayne's RPs for Shove It - Tony Santos - 09-11-2013
I actually thought it was pretty decent. However, the whole "Believe" catchphrase is a bit forced and out of place. Nonetheless, solid. However, based off of how close this is to what he generally writes OOC, as well as the samples of work that I have seen, I see raYne as potentially getting stale very quickly, with the same themes being churned out over and over again. Only time will tell.
rayne's RPs for Shove It - "Loverboy" Vinnie Lane - 09-13-2013
2 new RPs are posted for Shove It. He saw the feedback on the first RP and would like to know if anyone thinks he improved in the new ones, etc...
rayne's RPs for Shove It - Rebel - 09-13-2013
I enjoyed the second actually. Wasn't too bad. I haven't read the third one yet
rayne's RPs for Shove It - Archie Lawson - 09-13-2013
Definitely improving. raYne if you can see this keep up the work and continue reading other RPs to improve. If you have gotten over being stubborn you could definitely go somewhere in XWF.