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Atara Raven Offline
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#1
12-26-2019, 11:50 PM

So, honestly, I've lasted longer than I expected. I have the attention span of a squirrel and my interest shift quite frequently. So, kudos XWF for keeping it in check.

That said, I'm looking for opinions/feedback/ideas to keep or make this character more interesting to make a bigger impact moving into the new year. Any input is appreciated Smile
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#2
12-27-2019, 05:43 AM

As I've told you before, I think your stuff is great! Your writing is very polished, almost literary at points. The incorporation of the myth elements feels very fresh. Your biggest problem is kind of a "non problem" in that every time I read your stuff I feel like there should be more! I think if you worked on increasing your output and fleshing things out you could absolutely be a main eventer here. I have zero doubt about that!

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#3
12-28-2019, 05:40 AM

I agree with Engy. I rather enjoy your writing as it's a bit of fresh air. It's a very clean and easy read. I don't find myself being taken out of the writing because of careless mistakes or whole sections where it just seems like words were slapped together to try and drag out a word count. Again to echo Engy, the mythical elements you bring to your work is something that I honestly look forward to when I see that you've posted a new piece.

You have improved incrementally with each piece you've done and I think you've done a great job of getting out there and involving your character in what is happening in the fed beyond just her matches. I think it's a matter of when, not if you become one of the champions here.

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XWF FanBase:
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(Physically attractive male on every level; can seduce you; that disarming smile; those bedroom eyes.)


#4
01-01-2020, 01:12 AM

Honestly, I was skeptical more about the mythological aspect, especially in regards how far to take it. It's a different spin on this incarnation of Atara.

Output is something I have always struggled with. I'm accustomed to writing a paragraph or two, waiting for a response, write another paragraph or two, rinse repeat. Story plot between characters was briefly laid out before we began.

I try my best not to repeat information if I can help it, it's one lf those nail on the chalkboard things. I might start outlining, try to get some form of continuity between promos going.

Thanks so much for the support and advice.

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