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#1
08-17-2018, 05:53 PM

So this is my first attempt at writing a female character. I feel like things are beginning to click for me with this character, but would love to hear some feedback. Any and all feedback welcome, both good and bad.

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#2
08-17-2018, 06:32 PM

I really liked it, and I honestly don't have any major criticisms. She comes across very authentic and I look forward to seeing her and Jessalyn as a team.

Writing face characters is tough. I still struggle with Joachim, trying to find that balance of assertive but not too much of a prick. I think you really nailed it here, perhaps even better than me. If you're looking for something fresh to renew your interest, I think you may have it. Smile

I wish I had more constructive stuff to say, but I really don't. Do we have any IRL ladies here to chime in?

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#3
08-17-2018, 06:51 PM

I can confirm that my interest has been renewed with VV, and on top of that, after a short adjustment time, I am finding it easier to write for her than it even was with Graves.

I too would be interested in hearing a females perspective however.
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