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#1
06-06-2017, 03:45 PM

Hey guys, I know you all have some busy lives outside of XWF and etc..but I want any type of feedback (positive or negative) and see where I should go before I drop the next one soon.

http://xwf99.com/showthread.php?tid=27671 <---From Warfare

http://xwf99.com/showthread.php?tid=27995 <--- From High Stakes II

Anyone can help a brotha out in feedback?
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#2
06-06-2017, 06:57 PM

I think what you do is good. I don't know what your experience level is when it come to fed rping .I personally would enjoy cutting a promo with you before the deadline. So hit me up and we can figure something out.
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06-07-2017, 03:19 AM

One thing I notice is you'll need to proofread. I'm kinda positive you mean BRIAN and not BRAIN. Aside from that, its a very nice progression from a writing standpoint between Warfare and what you've done for ppv. I like the backstory. I'm a sucker for story.

There's a LOT of great roleplayers here, and I'd suggest taking some time and reading something from those around the top. It might give you an idea of how to get even better. How to better craft the story you tell. Rome wasn't built in a day, and we all start somewhere.

Overall, I like what you're doing. Keep studying, keep writing, keep improving.
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06-07-2017, 04:36 AM

I agree with Duke.

I too am a sucker for story, I follow Duke around like a lost puppy because he's awesome.

You've definitely shown improvement.

When I look for ways to improve my writing I go and read the works of Duke, Doc, Graves, etc. All top guys who have a knack for both story and trash talk.


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#5
06-07-2017, 06:41 AM

Hey, Jody, I can't message you until you enable your pm's.
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#6
06-07-2017, 05:19 PM

(06-07-2017, 06:41 AM)Mezian Said: Hey, Jody, I can't message you until you enable your pm's.

Check it now. I've enabled it.
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