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Feedback wanted! How's my latest works?
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Cain Offline
The Last Son of Eden



XWF FanBase:
Teens, some men, few kids

(cheered BECAUSE they break rules and bones)


#1
12-10-2015, 09:22 PM

Wondering how I'm doing. Got two up for Back in Black. Starting out slow and fleshing out Cain into what he was always meant to be.
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Frodo mother fucking Smackins Offline
Big Dick Playa



XWF FanBase:
Drug addicts, rebels, weirdos

(the villain you love to hate; has cult following; may deal drugs on side)


#2
12-11-2015, 01:35 AM

It was ok, there was one coding issue at the end, but it was ok. Not really sure why Cain is playing with Zombies. I feel like you're getting back closer to where you were before. I would work on setting more story, explaining why Cain tastes Orangutan shit, explain why he is killing people, and why he is so angry at Prince. And do more than tell us Cain is big and bad. Show us. Show us how much shit Cain can fuck up, don't just have Cain tell us he can do it.
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Cyren Offline
XWF Legend



XWF FanBase:
(.Awaiting user update)


#3
12-12-2015, 11:37 AM

It's solid and I've enjoyed what you've written.

  • XWF LEGEND (Hall of Legends)
  • XWF TOP 50 of All Time
  • 4x XWF Universal Champion
  • 2x XWF World Champion
  • 3x XWF Tag-Team Champion (w/ Jayde, Raziel)
  • King of XWF (1X)
  • X-Mas X-treme Winner
  • XWF Lethal Lottery Finalist
  • XWF US Champion 
  • XWF X-Treme Champion (8x)
  • XWF Lord of the Ring Winner
  • Co-Founder of 'The Black Order'
  • Architect of the XWF Hell Dome
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