...Any advice/feedback given is most appreciated...
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My advise is this, if you know you are talking make sure you space out the dialogue and actions. This was just my personal "peeve" of mines.

Other than that, keep up the decent work for this character; you'll might end up doing big things in this place.

I agree with JB, and I'd also add in that it's a good idea to have a certain series of events worked out in your head so you know to go from point A to B to C.

That's REALLY tough in a RP environment, and isn't always necessary, but it definitely helps when you can think of each roleplay as a sort of chapter in a series.

Not sure what you mean Vinnie in relation to this RP, because in the post before it my character was in that barn. But I appreciate the advice fellas

Honestly, I wasn't critiquing this RP in particular. Just kind of giving general advice and expanding on JB's point.

Best role play of the week as far as I'm concerned. My view is that content is more important than structure. What John means is that there is a line break missing between dialogue and narrative in a few points but that doesn't (in my few) take away from how well written it was. Not saying that John was suggesting this is a huge problem but his feedback in terms of stricture is correct; just watch your formatting tags.

Interesting scene, good dialogue and furthered the match story. From your opponent I was happy enough.

Noted. Thanks Karl.. have enjoyed working with you this week.

Likewise. Hope to work with you again some time.