Thank you all for the feedback.

Arthur, I would say about the coloring of text, I used to waste hella' time coding rps. It was fairly daunting. I figured in a way it doesn't really help with scoring and I could probably convey things better with text after quotes like:

Joey said with a scowl,

That type of thing. In the end it's always been about telling as good a story as possible, but it's something if you look at my previous RPs, I did a lot.

Lux,

The knob slobbery means a lot! This piece was fairly important for me to execute with a bang, so to know it had such an impact on a writer like yourself, well, that really means a lot.

That second paragraph was a struggle for me as well! So much so, I sent it to at least three or four other folks saying "Hey, does this read sensibly to you?" I'm grateful to know you got the overall point there though.

I did grow up in a small town, and I think the overall theme for this series is about recreating what might be an Americana classic instead of centered around the gilded age, or the great depression- centered around more modern themes. I just hope it turns out the way I've been envisioning it.

Thank you again for the kind words!!! Helps me know I'm on the right track here.

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