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rayne needs feedback - John Msdison 2.Faggot - 09-14-2013
Quote:I want to know what everyone thinks of the four part 'Satellite' story arch... and if you could check it out sometime, that would be wonderful. I stayed up for a long time finishing the fourth part... it's ten minutes to one.
The four parter is on the Shove-It RP boards here:
http://xwf99.com/forumdisplay.php?fid=16
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rayne needs feedback - Tony Santos - 09-14-2013
Honestly, those last two were just kind of exhausting and tough to read. Just my honest opinion.
rayne needs feedback - AlexandraCallaway - 09-14-2013
As his opponent, I must say it was a bit hard to piece together his "past" from the now stuff. They where a bit hard to read and I had to decode a lot of what he was trying to say.
rayne needs feedback - Cam Lang - 09-14-2013
You're first few RP's weren't that bad, this is my personal thought when I post this but I feel like you try to drag it on. It's not about quantity, it's about the quality.
rayne needs feedback - Jessie-ica Diaz - 09-14-2013
Confusing (and not in a good way,) cluttered, and drug like hell. Not saying you have to cut length or anything, but if you're going to write something that long; it better be fucking worth it. The last two in particular are where these complaints lie, by the by. Frankly, those last two weren't worth the length, and nothing really made me compelled to read them. Reading them felt like a chore, and that's not something you want the reader to feel. Now, not trying to be negative for the sake of negativity or anything, but there really wasn't much good that came out of the last two in my honest opinion.
Key word opinion.