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Feedback please - Talia Areano - 01-11-2017
I would like to know some of your opinions on my character development rp Postive Mindset.
re:Feedback please - Vincent Lane - 01-11-2017
(01-11-2017, 11:50 AM)Talia Areano Said: I would like to know some of your opinions on my character development rp Postive Mindset.
Welcome back, honey. I would say clearly spelling and word placement are the biggest challenges, which is good... because that means that all you have to do to fix it is proofread carefully. I put things through spell check, and then read it again before I post, this also helps with punctuation errors; like should be a comma here, or remove one there. Solid starting point. Keep on keepin' on.
Example.
( It is a bright, cold morning in St.Louis. By the overlook view of the city anyone can tell it had snowed, due to the snow patches throughout parts of the city. After some time, we came to a well kept neighborhood. It is(what?) snow it each one of the yards. But(comma?) good thing the streets have been cleared and most of the drive ways or(are?) cleared of snow as well. )
Feedback please - Talia Areano - 01-11-2017
Thanks! I will work on it more.