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Feedback please - RonnieWilkins - 03-23-2013
Can I get some honest feedback for my work this week? I'm obviously taking fire from all directions and I want to make sure that its because I did a good job. Be honest, you won't hurt my feelings.
Feedback please - CM Punk - 03-23-2013
You're amazing with words and paint an amazing image, cut a great promo and I love reading your work.
As for my suggestions? Chris Jericho puts it best, put your opponent over to get over..
If you say you're beating a scrub, well what's that make you?
But if you say.. "you may be the best in the world, but I'm your sun because this world revolves around me and you will be knocked out of alignment. "
Sounds like you're beating more than a "weakling"
Feedback please - KnightMask - 03-23-2013
Good point.
RE: Feedback please - RonnieWilkins - 03-23-2013
(03-23-2013, 07:47 PM)CM Punk Said: You're amazing with words and paint an amazing image, cut a great promo and I love reading your work.
As for my suggestions? Chris Jericho puts it best, put your opponent over to get over..
If you say you're beating a scrub, well what's that make you?
But if you say.. "you may be the best in the world, but I'm your sun because this world revolves around me and you will be knocked out of alignment. "
Sounds like you're beating more than a "weakling"
Thanks man, I wanted to make sure I was getting attacked so hard because my work was quality. Not because I was throwing shit out.
Feedback please - CM Punk - 03-23-2013
I think your work is quality, and as for the putting your opponent down, most people in real wrestling have that problem.. It's annoying.
Feedback please - RonnieWilkins - 03-23-2013
Ill definitely keep it in kind, thank you so much for offering your feedback.
Feedback please - Mister Mystery 17 31707 1 - 03-23-2013
I think you really stood out this week and showed you both deserved and appreciated a spot in the main event match. You knew it was a time to give it your all and you were even the first on your team to jump right in and get into it with RP'ing. When I saw your trash talk post to Kinwrathi you made me want to talk some shit in my own RP and lay the foundation to a possible program in the future between us, which from my end is a way of complimenting your game this week.
Far as suggestions go I think you might benefit by indicating which character is talking when it's a spot with much back and forth. I've always been a fan of either writing the name in front of the line or coming up with custom formatting for when it's my own character talking. I used to use text with glowing pink edges for all of my own former character's speaking so there was never any mistaking him from the co-stars even if a reader was jumping around or skimming, which some people do. I like the way you work in some references to your matches though in actual story rather than always separating story from trash talk like some people do. Keep switching shit up and experimenting as you go, dude, you're obviously very talented and really seem to be getting comfortable in your own skin here both o.o.c. and i.c.. If you ever feel like working on something moving forward hit my inbox anytime.
Feedback please - RonnieWilkins - 03-23-2013
The phrase praise from Caesar rings out here. You are extremely talented and it's been a lot of fun working with you this week. It would be a pleasure to work with you further in the future.