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#1
07-10-2013, 04:13 PM

Into the Unknown

I would just like to know some thoughts on my latest RP I have not wrote a RP in a couple weeks so I am interested to see what people think

Cheers in advance
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#2
07-11-2013, 09:27 AM

I think that it lacked some description, but I did like the dialogue. I would like to read more of your work.
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#3
07-11-2013, 03:22 PM

Like stated, just a tad more description and you are good to go man Smile
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#4
07-11-2013, 03:29 PM

Agreed with the previous two opinions. A bit more description would be fantastic. Dialogue is good, but I think it too could be a bit more detailed.
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#5
07-11-2013, 04:00 PM

Thanks everyone for your feedback much appreciated
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