Hey somebody do me a solid ( what the hell did I just say?) and give me some feedback on my RP's to Lackland over the last 24 hours. Now by honest I don't mean be an asshole. If I wanted to be insulted I would talk to my wife. Tell me where I went wrong or where I need to improve.

I'll take a looksee and get back to you. Where might I locate these rps?

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Okay, I think I figured out what you meant, lol. You're talking about the Federweight title stuff. I read the thread "Third Times A Charm" and I thought your material was great. Aside from a few minor writing errors, which can be chalked up to normal human oversights. Something everyone; including myself, has been guilty of at one point or another. I think your material is pretty damn good.

Also throwing this out there, your pin attempts on Zane have been wonderful, lol. I look forward to more.

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Well, you get an A for effort that's for sure.

You're another one that it's tough for me to truly expound on what you can do better because it's tough to describe. I honestly think you have a very good foundation to build from, and you put forth a lot of work in that series with Sarah (who, BTW is one of our best trash talkers at present so I wouldn't be too upset about the loss). The best I can say is that some of your barbs landed and some seemed kinda ho-hum. My best advice would be to try to avoid cliche's (if you've heard it said a bunch of times before, it's probably not all that effective). The thing that wins trash talk battles is the ability to be witty, biting, and innovative. Using unique turns of phrase or truly nailing somebody on a character weakness is the way to go.

Like I said, I think you have a good foundation, just try to cut out the more well worn insults and I think you'll do well.

I used to be pretty damn good at trash-talking, but over the years [20 or so] I've kinda lost the touch. But you seem like a great prospect... good luck, m8.