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Debut roleplay feedback please
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#1
04-03-2015, 06:40 AM

http://xwf99.com/showthread.php?tid=19417

I realize that my trash talk was a bit lacking, its something that i am hoping to improve on with my next roleplays.
Any feedback would be welcome and appreciated!
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#2
04-03-2015, 06:59 AM

I think it's quite good.

I like the swerve from thinking I was reading a gang member-style character to some kid playing video games. The style and layout are good, the pacing is well done, and the dialogue is realistic.

I'm curious to see more.
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#3
04-03-2015, 08:35 AM

I lol'd hard bro.

Bruce and Flynn should get high, play video games. Slay ass. Not each others. That's questionable.
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#4
04-05-2015, 06:58 AM

Thank your sirs, it's greatly appreciated.
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