Hi guys can I get any feed back on my seg last week or any of my rplays

Thanks

The more brutally honest the better:-)

But go easy on me lol

The presentation of your character and story is pretty basic at the moment. He's getting his thoughts out there, but they all follow a standard formula that you can find in any interview or promo.

What I'm saying is that nothing really sticks to my mind as interesting when I'm finished reading your work. It's written well, and it all makes sense. But it lacks character. The only thing that I know about Macbeth is that he likes to go to pubs and diners. That's cool and all, but you can only write about that a couple of times before you end up repeating yourself.

There's a lot of talented guys around here who still do a standard back and forth interview. Donathan, Satellite, Soldier, Duke, Angelus, and others. But the difference is that their characters have more depth and personality. Check them out sometime.

I think the whole punk-rocker/wrestler thing is pretty cool. I mean, that's a pretty wild combination.

Maybe that combination is something to flesh out...? The sort of punk-rock attitude infused into his life as a wrestler...?

Thanks guys