[ooc note-- since i know someone's going to say i shouldn't post feedback threads if i don't want feedback... i'll just combine all of mine into one. i do want feedback. i just don't want to be forced to change my character, or shorten my writing... and i don't feel i should shorten my work, because i returned to e-fedding for two reasons. 1) to do something i love so as to help with my emotions... and 2) so that i could prepare to focus on my story series. if anyone wishes to leave feedback for me... please do so here.

Thank you.]


Ok... I posted the following in Character Development and was hoping for some sort of response, but all DS said was some garbage about drugs... I'm straight edge. Bite me.

Anywayz... if ANYONE would respond to this, I'd greatly appreciate it. First off, the first post is from 2007. My work has become much better than then, but it's the backstory for my character [which I'm going to edit for XWF] and I'm very proud of it... it explains a lot of things.

But what I REALLY want feedback on is the post I made in response to N.A.Z.i. If anyone could let me know what they think, I'd appreciate it. Thank you.

http://xwf99.com/showthread.php?tid=6229

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And the following is the Prologue to the series of stories I'm planning on working on. The main reason I wanted to return to e-fedding, is because it's what ignited my passion for writing... and since it's been two to three years since I last seriously wrote, I thought this would be the best way to RE-ignite my passion, so I can truly focus on my short story series... which I entitled "The NeverEnding Epic".

In 2011... I was laying on the kitchen floor... outside, it was storming... and this idea came to me. For years, I had wanted to do something with multipe fictional universes... everything you can think of, The Simpsons, Harry Potter, Twilight, F.R.I.E.N.D.s... Super Mario, Poke'Mon, SuperMan... the Wizard of Oz, Star Wars, A Christmas Carol... anything. I wanted to mesh every fictional universe I've ever enjoyed, from books, movies, tv, video games, comic books, cartoons... whatever.

Over the years, I've thought of making a video game, cuz I used to make them in MultiMedia Fusion... I've thought of making videos with multiple different shows and movies, and I still plan on doing that at some point... but on that night, laying on the kitchen floor, staring up at the ceiling... an idea came to. To write. Parralel dimensions... not just the fictional universes themselves, but alternate versions... the show from the 90s, Sliders, inspired me a bit... as well as this piece by Jennifer Stone, "Invasion of the Nothing", which I included in the intro...

... and of course, the NeverEnding Story. The villain in my story is The Nothing, which I actually took from JennStone's piece, BUT, I do Believe in the back of my mind was 'Story'... despite the fact tgat I don't even think I named my story after the film. But it was one of my absolute faves back in the day, along with Labyrinth and Return to Oz. And I know it had a huge impact on me.

The thing is... this prologue is a HUGE contrast to what I have planned... the Prologue is based on the backstory of my e-fed character... and that's what the first book in the series is going to focus on... the early years of the brothers Reeve and Axl. And their abusive father, and the mother that leaves due to being beaten all the time... and the black bat.

PLEASE... if ANYONE checks out this piece, let me know what you think.

Thank you.

http://shanomacbry.tumblr.com/post/36056375757/the-never-ending-epic-prologue-the-black-bat

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The following are a few of the old roleplays I did as my parody character, Jack Hoff. Hoping that maybe someone will check out a couple of these out and let me know what they think... though, again, I'd REALLY like to know what people think of the Prologue I posted for my story series...

The character was kind of in the vein of the Blue World Order, in that he would make fun of the other wrestlers... there's also one in which he parodies the UnderTaker [who wasn't a part of the fed, it was just... Halloween or somethin'. Who the hell knows.] Would LOVE to get people's reactions. But bare in mind, these are from '08, and I've further developed my style since then... though, I began around '01, so this is much closer to my current style than where I started from.

I'm sure one or two of you may find some of this material humorous... hopefully... >.<

BTW-- Micah was upset about my making fun of Mr. XWF's profile. This guy right here? He's the one that originated that, as far as I go. He was the first character I used to truly lambaste others, and who was PURELY comedy-focused. He went over well... for a bit. Now, I've learned comedy must be balanded with a serious edge... which is part of the "New & iMPROVED" raYne. I call him 'The Storm 2.0 ' ... anywayz... here's the best of The Hoffster--

http://www.angelfire.com/wizard2/monkey1/hoff1.html

http://www.angelfire.com/wizard2/monkey1/hoff2.html

http://www.angelfire.com/wizard2/monkey1/hoff4_xoxo.htm

http://www.angelfire.com/wizard2/monkey1/hoff5.html

http://www.angelfire.com/wizard2/monkey1/hoff7_duff.htm

http://www.angelfire.com/wizard2/monkey1/hoff8_a.htm

http://www.angelfire.com/wizard2/monkey1/hoff8_b.htm

http://www.angelfire.com/wizard2/monkey1/hoff9.html

http://www.angelfire.com/wizard2/monkey1..._zawk.html

http://www.angelfire.com/wizard2/monkey1/hoff13.html

http://www.angelfire.com/wizard2/monkey1/hoff14.html

Here is the parody of the UnderTaker --

http://www.angelfire.com/wizard2/monkey1/hoff12.html

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Two old roleplays, as raYne, from 2007 --

http://macbry.webs.com/rayne1.htm

http://macbry.webs.com/rayne2.htm

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And HERE... is one of the very FIRST appearances of my character 'Legion', whom I've mentioned here before... he was made of both raYne, the light side, and Reeve, the dark.

THIS... is the ONE roleplay I REALLY wish a couple of you would check out. It's not even my best work... but it's a glimpse at the being that is Legion. And I would love for some feedback...

... just as I would in regards to the Prologue I posted in the other thread. If anyone would be so kind... I'd appreciate it.

http://www.angelfire.com/wizard2/monkey1/hoff11.html

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BTW-- DS? This one's for you, buddy.





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