First off, welcome!

As for feedback, I did read your promo. I think it was pretty strong. I like how you leveraged your past with Tristan into some drama and tension in the present, making it clear that you're not completely on board with what's been going on but that you're willing to chance it to rectify a hole in your resume, so to speak. It came off sensible and well written. Speaking of the writing itself, you have a pretty good vocabulary and by and large your writing came across as confident and illustrative. You have something a gift for metaphor, though the Holocaust ovens one was a little odd, lol...

The promo itself was serviceable, but I'm going to address one thing that I think the faction as a whole is going to have to come to grips with going forward. It's not a very strong argument to keep ripping on the XWF and it's talent like they're nobodies when the cold hard fact is that the faction hasn't had much actual luck winning high profile matches. That's not a personal shot, it's just something that somebody who has a lot of history writing "shoots" would look at and probably rip apart. I know I would have gone for the throat on that one. I think you would have been in a much stronger position acknowledging that, and maybe even ratcheting up some of the inter-faction tension with some "if I had been here, I would have gotten shit done". Again, what you wrote wasn't BAD per se, but I'm one of those people who has always felt that the key to coming across strong and confident is acknowledging past losses (granted, they weren't yours although that would have made it even easier on you) and stating why the won't happen again.

If you stick around I think you could be very successful. Also, as a general heads up you might want to change your user handle to your actual character name as it makes thinks less confusing.

Again, welcome!

EDIT: Oh shiiiiiit, mad props for using Snitsky as your pic base. In a hobby that tends to see people using the same bases over and over again, I've never seen somebody use him and always thought he'd be a great one.