I was wondering if I could get some feedback on my 3rd rp against Chris Chaos.

http://xwf99.com/showthread.php?tid=29113

So,

I've read quite a bit of your stuff and I enjoy it. You always seem to take me back to the old days of WCW and WWF with your promos.

This is my two cents.

Your writing is solid and it is a good read, but often it comes off as generic tough guy in my opinion. I always like your back story because you do a pretty good job of developing the character, but to me it also reads a little bland. My advice is to take a look at different people's stories and trash talk and get a sense of how they do it and make it your own. That's what I did. I was constantly struggling with TT so I took notice of what Chaos, Caedus, Doc etc were doing and built my own strategy.

You're great at this and I'll always enjoy your work, but I also felt compelled to give my opinion.

<3 barn

- Jeff